I would give this paper a "C." Although the writer clearly knows a lot about the topic and even appears to be enthusiastic in conveying information about the WWE, the sharpness of the essay is lost to the poor punctuation and spelling. Also, the paper does not have proper flow-- that is to say, the paragraphs do not transition from one to the other in the best order.
Also, I feel that paragraph two is awkward. It should either be broken up and integrated into other paragraphs or rewritten to be more relevant to the rest of the essay. Paragraph two just doesn't show us how pro-wrestling has changed like the other paragraphs do. And what is with the readability of the last paragraph?
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